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Last Practice for the Fox - Mr.Star

October 15th, 2014, 12:36 am

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MrStarster,

October 15th, 2014, 12:43 am

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Well, I think this will be the last little practice of this character for a bit. I wasn't getting much feedback over the past 3 days so I suppose I got lazy on the little guy. Still, I did get some and I tried taking that in while making this character. I realized after I put him in a purple suit that I made him almost like Miles Edgeworth. Didn't realize it until I made that last pose and it just said OBJECTION to me. I got a chuckle at lest.

So, feedback. Would like.
Name. Kinda needed.
And I would also like the feed back on the idea of making this CYOA comic.

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October 21st, 2019, 2:39 pm

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GabrielsThoughts,

October 15th, 2014, 1:05 pm

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I like the concept a lot. I suspect however that there is more information about the suspects or victims than presented within the notebook. I think character profiles should include BASIC ID and perhaps Enemies, Allies, and Love Interests if not Motive, Means, and Opportunity.

I don't view people as pawns, and far be it from me to judge your detective, but I have a problem with a detective that views solving something as serious as murder as a game. After all, he's then playing with peoples lives. However, if you want to quickly diagnose personality types you could use playing card symbols or psychogeometrics (Tiles/Diamonds = Merchant) (Hearts/Swords= Soldier) (Wands/Clover/Puppyfeet= Polititan/Erudite) (Cups/Spade= Doctor/Clergy) (Triangle= Choleric) (Circle= Sanguine) (Rectangle= Flagmatic) (Arch= Engineer) (Squiggle= Artist) etc.

MrStarster,

October 15th, 2014, 4:21 pm

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I didn't exactly know what is suppose to be in the book yet. Just put down some basic things I thought of then and there.
As for calling people pawns, guess that's also my "put down the first thing that came to mind" problem. I haven't came up with a good mindset or name for him yet but I do like the playing card ideas. Might actually do that.

Dregan,

October 15th, 2014, 4:51 pm

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He looks very much a 'Vincent' or 'Sylvester' to me if you fancy the route of more normal names. If you want to go a bit more... exotic or unusual, something like... Vetro, I dunno, just throwing ideas out.

MrStarster,

October 15th, 2014, 5:39 pm

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Funny. Vincent is another character I actually drew for another comic. It was for a game of mafia. Though Sylvester Vetro.... I think that might be good. Detective Vetro. I like. I like.

Shard,

October 16th, 2014, 2:20 am

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Mm... on the sprite itself, his chest seems kinda... wide, somehow? At least in comparison to his feet. I don't really know why, but it just seems a bit awkward. It also kinda looks like he's leaning forwards in some of his poses, but just slightly. Maybe one thing is leading to both of these? It's late and I'm not terribly good at explaining what I'm seeing here. But... I dunno, try making him stand a little straighter - like, the poses where he's holding stuff look fine but the others seem a bit awkward. Maybe it's because his shirt/chest - er, he is wearing a shirt, right? Anyway, it goes all the way to the edge of his muzzle and that makes it seem like he's kinda... puffing his chest out, which looks awkward on the poses where his legs are apart.

Also on the walk pose you should probably move the eye forwards a pixel or change the ear furthest from us so it's further back on the head to make it seem like he's not slightly looking at us while walking.

MrStarster,

October 16th, 2014, 9:37 am

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I think what you're seeing is that his little ascot thing is making it seem like he's puffing out his chest. He's kinda wearing a purple suit with black slacks. I will take everything into mind though and see what I can do.

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