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StarFox (W.I.P) -Update 4-

July 7th, 2014, 6:51 am

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Royle McCulloch,

July 7th, 2014, 6:58 am

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Yes I'm still working on this.
I've rewritten the story I had in mind for this comic now that i've gotten better ideas for the story I have restarted the comic. All I need to do is finish this cover.

Anyways, thoughts, critiques?

( Here's the previous update: http://reidynfriends.smackjeeves.com/comics/1952455/starfox-w-i-p-update-3/ )

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Viewer's Thoughts

Moon light madness,

July 7th, 2014, 7:03 am

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I... Don't like it.


I love it

Ultimate the Hedgehog,

July 7th, 2014, 11:48 am

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awesome

MrStarster,

July 8th, 2014, 1:46 am

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I can see that there is alot of love in this work and as it stands the majority looks well made and well done. Some of the lines still need a bit of a touche up though. Krystal's hair is still a bit sketchy and if that was the intent or not I cant tell.
The art itself makes it seem like its suppose to have smother lines and the roughness in areas kinda throws me off a bit from the rest looking well made. The gun Fox holds is a bit... wavy on some of the lines. That being the top section and bottom section. Looks like it started strait but somehow melted a bit upwards to contort to Fox's hand. The ships I'm not going to go into much since they still look REALLY sketchy which is a huge contrast to the rest of the art.
Speaking of contrast to it all, Krystal's ear is kinda bloby looking. Though a touch up should fix that. But the other character behind her suffers from the same eye catching different look from the rest of the art. Yes its rough and unfinished so I can chalk that to a wip but it still pulls my attention away from the rest of the art.
While I'm on that subject, you may want to fix her staff. It suffers from the same thing Fox's gun suffers from. The staff seems to have a bend in it staring from the bottom of her hand. The top part doesn't quite line up to the bottom. Her hand still seems like it should be holding a strait staff and not a bent item if it is suppose to have that "dink" in it.
Lastly, the BOLD lines I see going on in some sections either fade away into nothingness or just aren't there at all anymore in some places. I can understand fading lines or thinning ones but some areas really need to be outlined to make the whole thing look right, at lest to me.
Over all though I am enjoying the picture and how it is coming along. I can't wait to see the full thing!

Royle McCulloch,

July 8th, 2014, 8:24 am

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@MrStarster: YAY A CRITIQUE!!

MrStarster,

July 8th, 2014, 11:14 am

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Well as far as I know that's kinda what you wanted. It wasn't mean or hateful so I hope that wasn't a problem and that comment was more of praise for getting feedback and not sarcasm.
:D

Royle McCulloch,

July 8th, 2014, 11:17 am

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@MrStarster: no wasn't sarcasm. I was joyess because I rarely get any critiques like that.

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